Publication method: BookCreator. Narrator: Traveler's point of view. Process: Outline: Audiovisual sketch: The town's folk were happy. They were celebrating a good harvest year. A big pig was being cooked and some kids were running in and out the inn. And he could not care less. Before reaching the inn, the weather changed abruptly and he did not have other option but to come to the nearest town to seek shelter in the closest inn. He was hoping for the rumor of those ruins to be true; he would not be in that town if it were not for those merchants and their story. Ruins, an enormous and unexplored mountain and some kind of monster guarding it; He has heard a lot of stories like this one but just a few have shown him something of real interest. For some people, these discoveries could not mean less but for him, they have represented a better understanding of the indescribable. The people who came near him looked at him with curiosi
See what happens when you don’t mind your own business, buddy? now the world will burn due to your curiosity, yeah well deserved.
ResponderBorrarI took my time reading this part, what I really appreciate in this story is the traveler’s actions that you describe, doesn’t matter if they seem irrelevant, but they make you feel more sympathy for the character, like knowing his struggles physically and mentally.
Another thing to point in this part is that you were less descriptive with the traveler’s surroundings and more focused on what he did feel. And it was interesting to know that point.
Oh I wanted also to comment that I was expecting you to wrap everything up, but you decided to go for an open ending(?) not bad, because it seems that you want to keep going with the story. So keep going!
I never expected that the roar was product of such a big creature. While finishing to read this part I thought that the traveler could be crazy but I remembered that some uncommon things were happening to the town's folk and I really like that you talked a little bit about how were things going in the town after the traveler left... many people just continue the story focused on what happens with the main character but you kept talking a little bit about the town events.
ResponderBorrarT could see that the genre of your story changed a little bit, you started to narrate a fantasy atmosphere but then it became more like sci-fi and I think that's great.
Great story!..