First, I wanted to create something from one of my many adventures playing role-playing games. With these games, I can create my own story based on a world and characters already settled but, what if I take my own actions and experiences in these games and put it in my own story? My own world? So, this is one of the many adventures I've lived in this media and I'm gonna start my tale based on this: Apart from this "inspirational" material, I've been working on the world building of the fantasy world in which I want my story to be based: Structure of my story: Beggining: There is no clear explanation of the origin of the main character. He is a traveler arriving at one of the main cities of Yharnm. Middle: It is explained the origin of the worlds and what may lie beyond. End: It is not defined yet. Media: I'm planning to draw on Youtube to give a visual idea of how some events of the story are going to deve...
See what happens when you don’t mind your own business, buddy? now the world will burn due to your curiosity, yeah well deserved.
ResponderBorrarI took my time reading this part, what I really appreciate in this story is the traveler’s actions that you describe, doesn’t matter if they seem irrelevant, but they make you feel more sympathy for the character, like knowing his struggles physically and mentally.
Another thing to point in this part is that you were less descriptive with the traveler’s surroundings and more focused on what he did feel. And it was interesting to know that point.
Oh I wanted also to comment that I was expecting you to wrap everything up, but you decided to go for an open ending(?) not bad, because it seems that you want to keep going with the story. So keep going!
I never expected that the roar was product of such a big creature. While finishing to read this part I thought that the traveler could be crazy but I remembered that some uncommon things were happening to the town's folk and I really like that you talked a little bit about how were things going in the town after the traveler left... many people just continue the story focused on what happens with the main character but you kept talking a little bit about the town events.
ResponderBorrarT could see that the genre of your story changed a little bit, you started to narrate a fantasy atmosphere but then it became more like sci-fi and I think that's great.
Great story!..